http://i202.photobucket.com/albums/aa239/Norihiko_Kaede/fate2.jpg

This is my first time I made a wallpaper, so please give me a comment to my wallpaper if there something I missed or wrong with it

Wow , it's this really your first job, it's very nice, i think that more expereinces than i think the same, you have tlent i could say , make more and try many styles

Wow!
Excellent work. I like what you've gotten done here. Looking at this I can't really see anything that needs to be done to make it worth submitting. Hmm, all I can say is go for it. Submit it and I think you'll behappy with the results. :)
Chonrad

Only one thing: Place Your signature a bit lower so the taskbar will hide it entirely.

Unfortunatly I have to say that there are some things you should do before you can submit it.

1.
The scan of Saber needs cleaning. It looks a bit grainy and blurry.
I also think that the outer glow you added doesn't really work with the wall.

2.
The background is plain and boring (sorry if this sound harsh).
You can't just take the same image of Saber, resize it and put it on as a background.
That's a bit to simple.

Try to make a different background with some highlights. Take a look at the other wallpapers in the gallery. You can get some inspirations by looking at them (inspirations not copying).

3.
The colors you choose are nice and warm but I also think that you could use some highlights on them. Just the orange-yellow color looks a bit plain. Maybe you can try with some gradients or brushes to spice it up.

4.
The logo. There are some minor extraction errors (black lines) above the "x" and beneath it. They are just minor faults but because of the bright color in the background they can be really good seen.

5.
The signature. I would suggest to make it smaller and to put it nearer the bottom of the wall so that the taskbar will hide it.

Other than that it's a nice work for your first wallpaper. Wish you all the best and good luck ^___^

I think you did great...But just do what angel-voice says and you can be really great...
Saber is always nice as well...

Angel-voice is entirely right.

you need to overwork this and then it will look great.

Adding to what angel-voice said:
#3 about the background.
You have two white bubbles above the middle section that just look lonely. I would suggest either taking them out or adding more in various sizes and opacities to add more texture. But, as angel-voice said, you could also add a gradient or use some brushes to add more interesst.

Also, the duplicate face in the background not only seems simple, but it confuses the eyes. Faces tend to be the first place people go when looking at a piece, so when they see two of the same, it gets confusing. You may want to try and find other stock of the same character or a background in which she is sometimes found. It will make the wallpaper more interesting and easier to look at :)

I hope this helps ^^

I agree with angle-voice you need to clean up the white line (or at least remove them) around sabre other than that i really like the wall also you may want to make the text in the bottom right corner a bit smaller

i wouldn't mind if you left the orangy background i kinda like that it goes with sabre nicely

right now the work looks almost flawless if the needed chages are made then it would near perfect

http://i202.photobucket.com/albums/aa239/Norihiko_Kaede/fate3.jpg

I have already edited it and gave some light at the background but I don't how to make gradient or brush.

Yes a little more.....a liiitttttle bit more......
you just need to clean the edge of saber and it would be perfect^^
it's not much but theres still some white...things....on saber edge only a little bit...
if you ask how I notice that......many times being rejected over and over and over and over.........T_T
well...many rejection tend to make you sharp even on the tiniest detail>.<

The glow around Saber is gone but now I can see that the extraction needs some more work. The outlines are jagged and some of the inner lines also. Do some cleaning on the image but it might be better to find the same scan in a higher or better resolution.

I just noticed one thing. Parts of Sabers right arm are missing.
You need to redraw that part or it will look really weird.

I have already edited it and gave some light at the background but I don't how to make gradient or brush.

Which programm are you using? It's easier to help you if we know that.

If it is the first, it's okay. It's better than my first wall, believe me :), the font i don't like very mchh, but it's okay. the outline in the artwork can be better, but, it's patient, time and work. Or use renders ;)