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Yaone Paper
That's my wallpaper of Yaone. Do you think I can already submit it or is something still wrong?
Thanks for your answers.
Thanks for your answers.
The wallpaper is too small to comment on
from wat i can see, looks pretty grungey
her skin color seems to be the same as the floor (that might cause a problem)
i dnt get the phone's presence
awesome job so far! =_=
from wat i can see, looks pretty grungey
her skin color seems to be the same as the floor (that might cause a problem)
i dnt get the phone's presence
awesome job so far! =_=
I think the girl is a little low on detail, and the edges looks a bit pixelated imo. If you can clean up the girl, and make it more stand out compared to the rest of the wall you have a great wallpaper.
She doesnt really look liek shes sitting on the floor.. more like 2D.. you need shadowing along the edges of the floor. And the image is too blurry along with the text being sort of in the wrong place.
Please don't call me puppychow. *stabs username with a spork* Phoenix will do.
Not bad. The concept and dark atmosphere is very attractive. Here are some suggestions to make it better:
- Make the girl less blurry so that she stands out more in the foreground.
- Put shadows in appropriate places on both the girl and the telephone.
- Slant the tiles so that they're more diagonal rather than verticle. This will give them a more 3D look.
Hope that helps! I really like what you have here so far ^^
- Make the girl less blurry so that she stands out more in the foreground.
- Put shadows in appropriate places on both the girl and the telephone.
- Slant the tiles so that they're more diagonal rather than verticle. This will give them a more 3D look.
Hope that helps! I really like what you have here so far ^^
It's nice, but the text doesn't look very exciting and the wallaper itself is rather blurry. Other than those two things, I see nothing wrong with it. ^^
So that's the newest version. Less blury, featuring shadows and with new text. I'm still a bit unsure about the shadows, as I'm not too experienced in drawing them...
It is much more better now than the previous version
maybe you could add some waterdrop on the window since you call it a rainy day day?
and the telephone still looks kinda weird to me
maybe you could add some waterdrop on the window since you call it a rainy day day?
and the telephone still looks kinda weird to me
I like the improved version, but for some reason, I still think that the girl doesn't stand out enough...
You did a nice job with the shadowing, though, and the waterdrops that rasengan mentioned sounds like a great idea.
Also, the colors of the telephone cord look a bit muddled. You might wanna fix that if you can ^_~
You did a nice job with the shadowing, though, and the waterdrops that rasengan mentioned sounds like a great idea.
Also, the colors of the telephone cord look a bit muddled. You might wanna fix that if you can ^_~
Added some raindrops, the first drops I've ever drawn ^^
2 years 9 months ago
Still is lacking... i think the stock image of the character should be less blurry... and the fact i dont have a clue what the wallpaper means...
Your shadows are a little too dark and not cast outwards enough... assuming she's leaning against the outside wall in the sun, the shadows should be longer. Try casting them more off to the side and try and distort the girl's shadow where it crosses the angle between wall and floor, for added realism. The girl is a little low to be leaning, her hips should be closer to the line between floor and wall. I like the washed out feeling though, the brightness and everything conveys a sense of dryness and tension.
Well I didn't intend to have her leaning against the wall ^^° but maybe I'll try to do something about the shadows.
Intended or not, it'll look awkward if she isn't. She hardly looks as if she's sitting up straight, so I guess she'd be pretty uncomfortable without something to lean against ;P
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Once upon a time, there was a happily ever after.
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2 years 9 months ago
The shadows are still off... you need them thrown further away from the girl and phone... if it's a sunny day, there shouldn't be any raindrops, so the title is off... if you want raindrops, you need to get rid of the sunny look and make the wall darker. And what is the phone for? It appears to be just sitting there, without a cord hooking it into the wall (or going off the screen) it doesn't look real. :( You've got a good start, it just isn't quit there yet.
