Ok, i've done this poem months ago ( around january ).finally, i decide to post it here after correcting it again and again <!--emo&:blink:--><img src='style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/blink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='blink.gif' /><!--endemo--> hope to hear about what you guys think about it since my english is not that good...anyway, comments are welcome!!! thanks! <!--emo&:lol:--><img src='style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='laugh.gif' /><!--endemo--> <b><u>Fallen Angel</u></b>Waking up,in the world of darkness,emptiness,filled upon your soul,alone,in the dark fortress,with hate and fearbeyond the oracle utterances.Reaching hopelessly,to the stars above,that seems to befar beyond your reach,dreams shattered,like broken glasses,tearsfilling up your ice blue eyes.fallen angel,your heart is bleedingwith grief and pain,your wings are brokenlike shattered dreams,How I long towipe away the memoriesof your haunting pastorheal your wound that once filled with rageand emptiness.Free your soul,away from your wildest dreams,away from your emptiness,far,far away.fallen angel,rest your soul...

This is a sad poem.Wish I can see the wallpaper of that fallen angel ........why don't you try making a wallpaper regarding this poem.Don't you think it will make the poem more ' beautiful '? <!--emo&:P--><img src='style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/tongue.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tongue.gif' /><!--endemo-->Anyway, I think your poem is quite okay but I myself is not that pro. in this field........better hear the comments from others!Work harder!

I think it's a really nice poem too XDnice job reesha, yeah with your poem you could make a walland actually feel the emotion of your poem while making itmost of my walls are based on the feeling the characters isgiving off XD

Your english is fine reesha, like tate mentioned the important part is the emotional charge you get. beautiful job.

Thanks for the comments...i'll try to write more poems when i have the mood and post them here..<!--emo&:)--><img src='style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo-->anyway, i'll try the team of this poem and make it into a wall after i improve my walling skills...thanks again...<!--emo&:lol:--><img src='style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='laugh.gif' /><!--endemo-->

<!--QuoteBegin-reesha+Apr 11 2005, 12:11 PM--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(reesha @ Apr 11 2005, 12:11 PM)</div><div class='quotemain'><!--QuoteEBegin-->filling up your ice blue eyes.

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<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->Isn't it supposed to be icy blue eyes? I'll leave it up to you to correct it, but I dunno if it is correctThree things to say about this poem: Short, Simple but Emotional. Did you go through a course that teaches literature? I tried writing some poems but they were alll *bah*. Great poem! As everyone mentioned, a wallpaper will build up the emotion...

Well,pokemaniacY2K, i didn't go through literature courses and just attend english classes in school <!--emo&:)--><img src='style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> anyway, we only learn a little about english literature and i write this poem just according to my mood.plus, i write down what i think before adding up all of my ideas into a poem...it came out good just because of my luck...i guess <!--emo&:huh:--><img src='style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/huh.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='huh.gif' /><!--endemo--> thanks again... <!--emo&:lol:--><img src='style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='laugh.gif' /><!--endemo-->

What i do when i write a poem: a story by pokemaniacY2Kfirst, he types out anything he can think of related to the title he's working on.secondly,he deletes away words which he thinks is exaggerated.third, he looks for the words which rhyms (<-- dunno spelling lol..) and puts then in the end of each stenza... (<-- again, dunno the spelling XD)and he adds rubbish words in the beginning of each stenza (...) to the rhyming (.........) wordsThe final results is ... rubbish poems XDThe ENd.

Nice Job reesha besides wat pokemaniacY2K was saying ur peom is soft and sweet <!--emo&:D--><img src='style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif' /><!--endemo--> I think you hit a soft spot *starts to cry* for your information these are tears of joy!