Ok people...
I'm not very happy with
this one but I'n not too sure why...
it's too blue i guess...
maybe I should use more different shades.
hmm.. I guess I'll work on that,
any comments you have are more than welcome =3
feedback please~!

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oh yeah and...
no, I'm not removing the text... >D
sorry

Uhm...you don't want to remove the txt...
maybe all i can say is that her position..she looks like she is falling..and the colors in her is I think a little bit dull.why not colors like those on oil pastel..etc..
your design is great..i saw ths one on Tv "atlantika"...
anyway...i think the BG and her does'nt relate much..bubles maybe or something that relate to water..
hope it helps...

Well that's the best position I
could get her in without having her
be all tiny and having to mess up
the whole thing
Umm.. I don't know what you mean by
oil pastel colors ^^, but I am working
on geting shades other than blue in it and
still keep the general blue color.
As for the relation to water well I tryed to keep
the lines curvy to have an flowing feel =] (kinda)

Well, 1st I've just gotta say, this is very, very beautiful (and I agree, absolutely keep the text, it looks great ^^)
As far as critiquing goes, I think I see what might look off to you:
1.) the blue shades in the background only match her uniform, none match her hair or locket. it would probably come a lot more to life if you added some aqua shades that match those parts of Ami's color scheme.
2.) The dirt/scratches stuff, I'm not sure, but I think it stands out just a little to much. Only a little though, maybe tone them down a ways and see how it looks?
3.) The window frame in the corner, it worked really well for the Mars color scheme, but I'm not sure it matches Mercury's colors so well... I'm thinking something with a more silver tone, still darker, but maybe not quite so rough looking in texture?
Well that's all I can think of, I really hope I was able to help you some ^_^

I'm not sure if this is intentional or not, but the pink part of her sleeve turns blue when it's not over her arm/outfit. About the background, you might try to slightly vary the shades of blue in the main circle (where they're all the same color). Otherwise it looks great!

hmm, i like it alot ;)
the only thing I could really see that might help as an improvement would be to tone down the background. As it is right now, she really blends in, but almost too much? If the background was slightly more faded, or blurry or some other effect to move it more to the background, she would stand out just the little bit more and really be the focal point!

other than that, the previous suggestions of (1) changing the sleeve color to pink all the way, and (2) adding in some blues/aquas from her hair ... both are very good suggestions

good luck, look forward to seeing the changes

Well the thing is I don't want
to make her stand out so much... =s
the background and her are supposed
to be the same thing, all one plane.
I will change the color on her sleeve though
I guess it does look wierd xD
and I'm still working on putting more
colors into it, the aquas look really wierd
for some reason >( I'm trying to be careful
on the shade T.T
I'm beginning to dislike this wall...

Personally, I like the pink in her sleeve.

I see no problems here about this.I understand why you don't wanna remove the text.
She looks good enough for submission.

This is already submitted! congrats!