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AIR
This is for the Air contest on mt. I haven't submitted it yet cuz I might color it.. or I might not. Who knows, I probably won't even end up submitting it cuz I'm lazy like that and some parts look weird.. I think the proportions are off :X I guess I'm just gonna post this here for now. And yes, I know she doesn't really look like Misuzu and some parts of her outfit are off, but I don't really like the some of the air art >_> I've never seen the anime either, I'm just drawing it I guess. Lol.. screwed up the inking.. once again. Comments and critiques appreciated as always (:
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link: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v246/iridianwind/fbbb4576.jpg
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link: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v246/iridianwind/fbbb4576.jpg
#96076 Quote Report Edited by ~iridianwind 3 years 3 months ago
Very pretty!
from what i can see there are very little mistakes in your drawing...
the only things i see that you need to fix is her left arm..they seem abit weird like her upperarm is in a weird angle
and the 3 fingers on her right hand are sharp at the end compared to the others
but all in all really good cg it >XD
from what i can see there are very little mistakes in your drawing...
the only things i see that you need to fix is her left arm..they seem abit weird like her upperarm is in a weird angle
and the 3 fingers on her right hand are sharp at the end compared to the others
but all in all really good cg it >XD
That's a great pic!
one thing that you should fix is the left arm, the position is very tiring to look at (if you know what i mean)
and you should make her right arm bend up and her hands curled as if she wants the bird to rest on her fingers... (my opinion, you don't really have to change it)
but everything else looks great! I love your attention to hair detail and the accentuated lines in her clothes! :)
cg it! xD
one thing that you should fix is the left arm, the position is very tiring to look at (if you know what i mean)
and you should make her right arm bend up and her hands curled as if she wants the bird to rest on her fingers... (my opinion, you don't really have to change it)
but everything else looks great! I love your attention to hair detail and the accentuated lines in her clothes! :)
cg it! xD
Hmm.. wow, you've improved your lineart skill another level again. :O It looks pretty much ready to color.
First thing I noticed wrong would be her left arm, as said on the previous two post, perhaps you should make her left arm curve more toward the viewer.
Also, her body is facing directly straight toward the viewer, already she's looking on to the right, and reach for her right side, perhaps it'd look better if you tilt her body slightly to make it look more interesting, like tilt her body more toward her left side, have her arm stretched out to her right, move her left shoulder back a little, and her left arm closer to herself and curved slightly toward the viewer. Also her legs, I think it'd look better to either show her whole leg or not at all, but I think i'd look better to have her skirt cover it up. But then, all that are just suggestions/critiques.
This piece looks very clean and ready to color. Hehe, I feel like doing another collab again, perhaps I too can take my coloring skills to another level now since I have the confidence to do so, especially now that drought down a simple background.
[Edit] Also, the back of her head looks really puffy, almost too wide, try to shrink it a little, unless if it's like that in the anme (tho I still have to watch it, but i have quite a few reference to it - hehe)
First thing I noticed wrong would be her left arm, as said on the previous two post, perhaps you should make her left arm curve more toward the viewer.
Also, her body is facing directly straight toward the viewer, already she's looking on to the right, and reach for her right side, perhaps it'd look better if you tilt her body slightly to make it look more interesting, like tilt her body more toward her left side, have her arm stretched out to her right, move her left shoulder back a little, and her left arm closer to herself and curved slightly toward the viewer. Also her legs, I think it'd look better to either show her whole leg or not at all, but I think i'd look better to have her skirt cover it up. But then, all that are just suggestions/critiques.
This piece looks very clean and ready to color. Hehe, I feel like doing another collab again, perhaps I too can take my coloring skills to another level now since I have the confidence to do so, especially now that drought down a simple background.
[Edit] Also, the back of her head looks really puffy, almost too wide, try to shrink it a little, unless if it's like that in the anme (tho I still have to watch it, but i have quite a few reference to it - hehe)
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Tate-kane: Thanks for pointing out the errors. I fixed her fingers and ther left arm to the best of my abilities.. I couldnâ??t really do anything major to the arm with only the computer though, so I made it a bit less bent.
Hermit-boi: Sorry I couldnâ??t fix her right arm.. I canâ??t really do that on the comp cuz itâ??d turn out really bad and I already inked the drawing so um.. yea ^^; But I donâ??t know if Iâ??d do it in the first place since the bird might be kind of too big and heavy to rest on her finger? Iâ??ll keep things like that in mind next time I do something similar though .. thanks for your comments :)
Shanku: I fixed what I could.. I couldnâ??t really tilt her body since thatâ??d require me redrawing the whole pic ^^; But I did have that in mind while I was making the picture; I was just afraid Iâ??d over turn the body so that her head would be in an impossible position though ( Iâ??ve seen that on some published drawings and it just didnâ??t look right) so I just stuck with the safe way :X I also reverted back to the way the pic originally was which was tilted and with more of her legs showing (although I reworked the legs and they still look weird but oh well.. thereâ??s only so much I can do on the comp alone >.
Hermit-boi: Sorry I couldnâ??t fix her right arm.. I canâ??t really do that on the comp cuz itâ??d turn out really bad and I already inked the drawing so um.. yea ^^; But I donâ??t know if Iâ??d do it in the first place since the bird might be kind of too big and heavy to rest on her finger? Iâ??ll keep things like that in mind next time I do something similar though .. thanks for your comments :)
Shanku: I fixed what I could.. I couldnâ??t really tilt her body since thatâ??d require me redrawing the whole pic ^^; But I did have that in mind while I was making the picture; I was just afraid Iâ??d over turn the body so that her head would be in an impossible position though ( Iâ??ve seen that on some published drawings and it just didnâ??t look right) so I just stuck with the safe way :X I also reverted back to the way the pic originally was which was tilted and with more of her legs showing (although I reworked the legs and they still look weird but oh well.. thereâ??s only so much I can do on the comp alone >.
#96913 Quote Report Edited by ~iridianwind 3 years 3 months ago
[iridianwind]
It's ok, go fix her left hand (change it so that it faces toward the viewer) also, i think you need to beef up her chest a lil bit (^^;; cuz I just digged up some air reference images off google. Also, when is that air contest's submition date? I'd prolly be able to finish coloring it after next weekend.. if it's ok with you.. (^_^;;
It's ok, go fix her left hand (change it so that it faces toward the viewer) also, i think you need to beef up her chest a lil bit (^^;; cuz I just digged up some air reference images off google. Also, when is that air contest's submition date? I'd prolly be able to finish coloring it after next weekend.. if it's ok with you.. (^_^;;
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3 years 3 months ago
Simple but cute. Promising talent.
Shanku: Umm sry I don't really have time to fix anything anymore, and I really can't draw a whole hand on the comp.. just doesn't work that way >.< And her chest.. well.. I don't think it really needs to be larger, accuracy in figure is hardly what I've been going for since I've already redone the whole face so I don't really think it matters. Anyway, the weekend's over and it's back to school and college apps for me. The contest ends on October 1st btw.. you don't have to color it if you don't want to though since I won't be able to make anymore changes :X
Luthien: Thanks for the feedback :)
Luthien: Thanks for the feedback :)
October 1st? dang... I wouldn't have time to color it then, cuz I'd be going back home (no internet there) then coming back to campus on sunday night... :(
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Your lines look delicious once again iridian!
let us all know what school you're eyeballing xD
...like tate said, cg it! >=D
let us all know what school you're eyeballing xD
...like tate said, cg it! >=D
Hahha thanks evol.. CG will be last on my list for now.. I hope. And uh.. school.. yea um.. I want to go to UVA if I can get in. Though I seriously doubt I can cuz my grades suck >.< But I can always try! X_x
This post has been filtered for improved legibility #98614 Quote Report Edited by ~iridianwind 3 years 3 months ago
Wow, That's very nice. I see some minor mistakes in proportions and angle though.
3 years 3 months ago
Oh I think its pretty its been a while since I did drew line art. I drew one on the computer and it looks liek phooy
Oh thats very pretty, but i think your anatomy needs a bit of work. But you got a pretty decent drawing there, nice flowy feeling to is, very nice AIR feel
3 years 3 months ago
Ahhh~ Beautiful. I don't know if there is anything to say... Others have already pointed out that arm, and other than that, there isn't anything wrong. ^__^;
Reminds me of a picture I drew of Misuzu only because I drew her randomly standing somewhere with a bird flying at her. x__x; But your picture is a million times better~
I wish I could do lineart that clean and smooth...
Reminds me of a picture I drew of Misuzu only because I drew her randomly standing somewhere with a bird flying at her. x__x; But your picture is a million times better~
I wish I could do lineart that clean and smooth...