Hello,

Supermochi is right about those vague lines. Anyhow those can be fixed with a careful touch of a soft eraser. Nice work on softening the lines ;). Coming along wonderfully. The hair color (IMO) looks terrific. Everyones is different but I like it. It gives it a very romantic touch. Hmm...I suggest...

- Get rid of the group of birds in the lower right corner. There are plenty and those ones seem out of place.
- There is just one more thing that needs to be there but I CAN'T PUT MY FINGER ON IT XD! I know its just a little something. It seems like there should be an extra "effect." Not necessarily meaning some form of landscape. I think that'd ruin it. Hmm...maybe a "Lens Flare" would do the trick? However you'd need to work with it to make it fit XP. Plus I recommend setting it on top of everything else BUT the feathers. That way your get the little light circles on top of the scan. Makes for a better impression of light ;). You want to make it seem slightly spiky NOT "round."

Here is something I did and found out what it was missing XD. A light source. Naturally you should see a light source when using clouds in the background except for blue skies (you can get away with no light source more easily with blue). However in this situation we naturally want to see a light source. So here's something I did for a light source. Just an example ^_^.



I hope this was at all insightful ^_^.

Have a nice day.

Adding to what chaox said, you could also Clone Stamp those lines out and on the birds as well if you want them gone.
I quite like the suggestion for a light source but I prolly would go with something subtle, because bright sources would distract attention away from the main vector work - which is not good given you work so hard for it!
Or you could just add a simple subtle title :)

I can understand that due to the ambient light the characters are tinged red, but there's something about the color that doesn't look very convincing to me. I can't really put my finger on it, it's possibly because the vector has been tinted to the point it's basically all about the same hue. Try playing with different blend modes, and maybe increase the transparency of the tinting layer.

Flocks of birds do work better than scattered ones! But the others are right, you don't need that many flocks of birds... I personally think you could afford to remove those at the bottom right and top right corners.

elfe-noire43

Maybe it missed a floor ... i'll try to add some trees silhouettes/ grass or water near the bottom ^^

I have an easier suggestion for you... put them on a balcony. All you have to do is add the silhoutte of some railings behind them.

Chaox

Here is something I did and found out what it was missing XD. A light source. ... Just an example ^_^.

Yep, that seems to be the 'missing' bit. Imho the lens flare is a bit overdone, but it's a useful visual reference.

ciao!

I think the feathers could have slightly softer edges, but they look good.

Try making their hair reflect more with the sun. Because the sun seems really bright in this one, it should interact with other object. I would suggest some harsher shadows on the characters as well.

Great stuff though. The vector is really complicated and really nicely done. Kudos to you and keep trying to make it better! This could get loads of faves in the gallery with just a few alterations I feel!

Well i tryed several tips to make the light source but end up with the lens flare T_T
Here is my new try ??
What do you think about it ? The coloring of the character and the light source ... ??
I also fixed the lines ^^
Idecide to make a soft light source because since it is sunset ... the sun doesn't look as bright as when it is at zenith ^^
The 2 characters are twins and they have the same hair color ^^

I think its absoutly wonderful now. The only thing is this... Their hair color is exactly the same. Maybe you should try to make his hair a little darker. Just a suggestion. But so far I love it!

Keep up the good work!!

^_^

The 2 characters are twins and they have the same hair color ^^

Oeh I like this very much, really a romantic setting and the colors are all fine. Like hamsteranonymous said, try placing them on a balkony, but a classical greek styled one :P *lol hope you know what I mean* Might work out but sure of that. And maybe as a finishing touch: 'the adding of a own created logo with a suitable text'.

I already even like it how its now, when this one is done, its gonna be in my favorites. Good job!

Ah, you fixed the color! It looks just right this way. And the sun-behind-the-clouds with the lens flare, it's neat! The softer light is also a lot more suitable for the atmosphere you're trying to create. *pats back* Good job!

The clouds to the left of the sun need to be tweaked, the whitish splotch there doesn't look quite right given the new lighting. Also, there's a very bright small yellow spot from the lens flare that doesn't quite fit. (Near the dude's hands.) Maybe try painting over it?

Yulaw

try placing them on a balcony, but a classical greek styled one :P

Yeah, that's precisely what I had in mind when I suggested the balcony! Carved stone railing, w00t! Actually, only the top part of the railing will show. As a rough guide, it should come up to around the characters' waist level.

A couple of other things:
- Just above the signature, near where the birds were in the bottom right corner, there are some brush marks ... It may be just me, but it looks strange, not like or clouds anything.
- Softer edges for feathers, per umboody. Perhaps a bit of transparency for the nearest layer of feathers; they're a little 'too white'

What can I say... this has transformed dramatically since the first version. Good work!

hamstersanonymous

The clouds to the left of the sun need to be tweaked, the whitish splotch there doesn't look quite right given the new lighting.

Do you mean the clouds before the sun ? or the cloud just left to it ??

For those before the sun : The whitish parts are here because it reflects the sun ...
Did'nt the balcony looks a bit odd ??
+ First attempt at text :p i definitely must work on it ^^

I like the balcony, it's a nice touch. and i really like the hair color change, makes them more vibrant. the brown made them look kinda sickly.

ya, the text is gonna need some work. i don't mind the font but you have it too faded/washed out into the bg. obviously you don't want it to stand out too much but don't fade it that much so that we can't read it.

it's really starting to look awesome! :)

Well ... it's holyday time in my country so i'll be out of AP for about a week T_T ... i'll keep working on this one ... and will show you the result when i'll return T_T bye

Hello,

Text isn't very readable. I like the balcony but I'm not fond of it being a silhouette. I think your should make it visible because the light isn't that intense and the black is kind of distracting. Wonderful job on the "Lens Flare." This piece just keeps getting better with each update. Just work on that balcony, text, and I'm sure you'll have a winner ;).

Have a nice day and happy holidays.

elfe-noire43

Do you mean the clouds before the sun ? or the cloud just left to it ??
For those before the sun : The whitish parts are here because it reflects the sun ...

The highlights where the sun peeks out from the clouds are fine... in fact, they're very well done. I wasn't talking about those. I meant the pale patch, along the left edge of the wall, left and slightly above the sun and that flock of birds.

Try picking out their hair color for the text, I think it'll work quite well. The drop shadow either needs to be more prominent or removed entirely, rather than helping, it's making the text seem blurry. The font is nice, but perhaps the small letters could be a bit larger? They're kinda small compared to the capital letters.

Hmm, the balcony looks a little queer. From what I see, you're putting them at the corner of the balcony... but looking at the angle of the railing on the left and right, the angle is too wide, doesn't look like a right angled corner given our perspective. Not sure if I'm making any sense, I'm having trouble describing what I'm thinking. =X

I suggest a simple straight railing - either horizontally across the wall, or following the angle of the existing right side railing (so that the guy is leaning on it). Or if you really want it to be something like that, try a curved shape (semicircular balcony).

Looks like I was wrong about the silhoutte though. Chaox is right, the black is too sharp given the kind of lighting... you'll need give the railing some color and work on the shading of the carved columns.

Nice work, we'll see you again when after the hols. Have a good break!

I like your improvements on the wall but it needs a little fix up though, the shape of your balkony is great but I suggest making him visible and giving a bit of a 3d feel / shape ( emboss maybe ). Next to that adding a stone pattern and changing the color to lightgrey/white to have that greekish feel :P.

Next is the text, I would really like to see some kind of logo in combination with the text and im not really fond of the font (lol funny lines :P).

Have a nice holiday!