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Ghost in the Shell Tech Wall
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3 years 5 months ago
Lots of vector work on this one, but I'm not sure on the background and the placement of a few things... help would be very appreciated!
Trying for the june contest, Soylatigre? vector looks awesome but definitely needs some more tech stuff.
look around for more brushes, or you can create your own.
need...some...color...even if it's just one to make something stand out.
although..about the vector, just one thing is really really weird and creeping me out.
on HeR left eye. there's a shadow from hair? that's way below and it doesn't connect with anything so..it looks a bit ...weird.
i would suggest having some radiating...tech things coming off of the big..circle thing.
PS> just noticed something reallly tiny..
her left arm is missing a tiny piece there at the bottom ;D
look around for more brushes, or you can create your own.
need...some...color...even if it's just one to make something stand out.
although..about the vector, just one thing is really really weird and creeping me out.
on HeR left eye. there's a shadow from hair? that's way below and it doesn't connect with anything so..it looks a bit ...weird.
i would suggest having some radiating...tech things coming off of the big..circle thing.
PS> just noticed something reallly tiny..
her left arm is missing a tiny piece there at the bottom ;D
Amazing Vector *love the eyes*
The simple background! well, I don't think a more colorful one is that needed, but the fact that it has the same sharpness level as Kusanagi's vector make them compete somehow. Distorting the backgound or adding another distorted detail would make it take it's place *the place of the background*
Another thing, apart from the shadow over the left eye that blu3angl mentioned, there's another shadow weird thing in her right. I place a picture pointing those little things for you to fix *cause it's a great wall to be* *and sorry for circling your wall I know it looks horrible, sorry!
Oh, and try not to take your signature to the absolute sorner, leave a little space between the text and the sides of the wall.
Btw SoyLaTigre! wich font did you use for that signature of yours! I love it
Keep it up
The simple background! well, I don't think a more colorful one is that needed, but the fact that it has the same sharpness level as Kusanagi's vector make them compete somehow. Distorting the backgound or adding another distorted detail would make it take it's place *the place of the background*
Another thing, apart from the shadow over the left eye that blu3angl mentioned, there's another shadow weird thing in her right. I place a picture pointing those little things for you to fix *cause it's a great wall to be* *and sorry for circling your wall I know it looks horrible, sorry!
Oh, and try not to take your signature to the absolute sorner, leave a little space between the text and the sides of the wall.
Btw SoyLaTigre! wich font did you use for that signature of yours! I love it
Keep it up
I've seen your previous walls and they're not bad at all, so I believe you'll be able to pull this one off just fine.
I hope my crit doesn't seem that brutal, but the level of my crit suits the level of my artist.
So:
- I don't like the plain grey of the circle things. Perhspa you can adjust some overlay, opacity, and etc etc. You can refer to some high-tech walls made by other wallers if you want to know what I mean.
- To achieve that tech feel, it'll be nice if you can add a organized abstract (ahaha...oxymoron +_+) bg. Once again, check other walls for reference.
- If you want crosses, you may want them to vary in size and opacity. You can simply look at Bantam's old walls for reference: banime.com He does a superb job at adding random brushing.
- I don't really like the huge close up on the face, esp how it's so plain. Perhaps you can push a bit more detail as in a grayserg style thing.
- Although the font you used for your sig is beautiful, it'll have to go because it doesn't fit the techy feel.
In summary, just play around with abstract bgs and overlay brushing. The white bg just doesn't do right now.
I hope my crit doesn't seem that brutal, but the level of my crit suits the level of my artist.
So:
- I don't like the plain grey of the circle things. Perhspa you can adjust some overlay, opacity, and etc etc. You can refer to some high-tech walls made by other wallers if you want to know what I mean.
- To achieve that tech feel, it'll be nice if you can add a organized abstract (ahaha...oxymoron +_+) bg. Once again, check other walls for reference.
- If you want crosses, you may want them to vary in size and opacity. You can simply look at Bantam's old walls for reference: banime.com He does a superb job at adding random brushing.
- I don't really like the huge close up on the face, esp how it's so plain. Perhaps you can push a bit more detail as in a grayserg style thing.
- Although the font you used for your sig is beautiful, it'll have to go because it doesn't fit the techy feel.
In summary, just play around with abstract bgs and overlay brushing. The white bg just doesn't do right now.
3 years 5 months ago
highkneesI've seen your previous walls and they're not bad at all, so I believe you'll be able to pull this one off just fine.
I hope my crit doesn't seem that brutal, but the level of my crit suits the level of my artist.
So:
- I don't like the plain grey of the circle things. Perhspa you can adjust some overlay, opacity, and etc etc. You can refer to some high-tech walls made by other wallers if you want to know what I mean.
- To achieve that tech feel, it'll be nice if you can add a organized abstract (ahaha...oxymoron +_+) bg. Once again, check other walls for reference.
- If you want crosses, you may want them to vary in size and opacity. You can simply look at Bantam's old walls for reference: banime.com He does a superb job at adding random brushing.
- I don't really like the huge close up on the face, esp how it's so plain. Perhaps you can push a bit more detail as in a grayserg style thing.
- Although the font you used for your sig is beautiful, it'll have to go because it doesn't fit the techy feel.
In summary, just play around with abstract bgs and overlay brushing. The white bg just doesn't do right now.
It's not brutal at all! Very very helpfull... @~1@ I totally get you on the plainness of the vector- I started doing the 'Greyserg' sort of thing with the eyes and lips, and wanted to carry the same sort of thing throughout the rest, but I just couldn't think of anything. That, and I didn't want it to be a 'Greyserg copy' if you know what I mean.
As for everyone elses comments: Those shadows really do look weird now that I look at them. I followed the screencap exactly, but even the pros make little mistakes here and there. The Bg does look a little plain, so I'll work on adding more tech stuff. (Without relying on brushes too much- I really want to make a lot of this myself.)
Thanks for the help so far! *goes to work*
3 years 5 months ago
Added some color and vectored more tech stuff. I also experimented with Motoko a bit, adding a few varying colors and such. I like the shading on her face, but I'm not sure about the hair...
I think the hair looks fine. Doesn't seem there really needs to changes made to this wall.
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