This is my first wall. Please comment&critique. I look forward to new suggestions. Tell me what you like/dislike, what I should do, take away, etc. Thank you~



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...my other topic got messed up so I made a new one...

Honest opinion as usual, here i go:

not enough depth, what do i mean though? i mean the colors need to be richer, stand out more rather than...flat

the font choice at the bottom left needs to be improved, it's barely readable

the render itself is not very eye-friendly, he just looks uhh...im not sure if you can fix this but i personally would never use a picture like that where it's stuck between real and anime

you have a good theme, that's always a brilliant start, but yes add more depth to this and then let's have a look

Aiight, I hope I improved it a bit.


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Ah I see well for starter (Please don't take offense) but there are better choices of fonts. Perhaps you might visit www.da-font.com something that flows would seem like it would go better like a cursive script. Also you should choose another color for your font so it blends in better. I generally go with around the same color but so the font is readible but blends as well as I can get it too. I noticed though you did add richer color however, the grid line boxes (I'm assuming you used a water paper filter and set it to a different blend or close to those lines). But I really don't think that this wall needs them at all.

Well that's all I have to say, I hope it helps!

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Okay I have the 3 versions in front of me at the same time...

So first the theme color is really nice in all the blending and matching of the colors is really cool so it's a good start.

As for the scan it's not the first time I see it in that kind of wall but you managed to make it look nice... Except that on the two last version it's really TOO blurry. You need to come back to the first version of the scan and just try to make it a bit more saturated.
Yeah like already said before the square texture on top of everything is not really making any good in your wall. Why not try an other kind of texture if you feel like using one? You have paper, wall, rock, parchment... textures...

The saturation in the second version seems the best for the character (without the blur mode of course) and for the bubbles the best is in the third version for me...

Just a last point... Make sure your wall is well balanced... The left top corner seems really plain... You can add some curves or light bubbles if you feel like it...

Good luck and keep working it's really nice

Thank you guys :D
This stuff really helps.


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Hi~
good job for the 1st timer"
i like the middle stuff"
but the right upper corner C4D stuff didn't work out as i look at it.
and for a bit suggestion put a text near the middle stuff.
put it at the low left side of the middle stuff with nice text alteration.
of course with connected meaning with the wall"
that's all from me~ no offense"

jya nee~

regards, sen

I believe the first version, with its simple layout, is best. This latest one divides attention between two areas because of those swirls in the corner. Maybe the texture could be more transparent and the font could use some changes but the first one is better than the revisions.

I probably wouldn't desktop this though, because it's so bright. Just a personal preference.

I do like the first one, too.
You just should get rid of the textures, make the big stripes in the background a little bit darker, also the flowers under the bubbles, and use the same font as in your last revision!

~Koharu

I think you should definitely stick with your first one, as there are a few problems with your latest:
The design in the upper left hand corner is unnecessary and distracts from the main focus of the wall, which is your character
The way you emphasized the designs next to the character once again places the emphasis on the designs and not the character.

Anyway, the character in your first wall is much more defined, and it's just a cuter wall ;)

Nice wall
the green circles annoying me
remove the circles that on the render
the colors are faded
and all the wall is glowing and its unpleasant for eyes
add text (from wher the guy on therd post say).
i love the color combination

Everyone's given some good advice, I just wanted to put what I thought.

Ok the swirly's you added to the corner don't fit with the rest of the wall. Their purpose there is correct but it shouldn't be so dark and disjointed from everything else. What I would suggest is using either the circles brush or the flowers brush up there and making it the lighter green and more faint. That way it won't drag your eye away from the rest of the wallpaper and it'll fit in with the theme.

I don't agree with getting rid of the circles that cover him. I think that they look good although maybe making just the dark green ones a shade lighter will help they eye back to the focus of the character. If you get rid of them completely then I fear your wallpaper would look too plain and not work as well.

Your character is still looking too blurry especially next to the original. Like ~zazou8888 said use the scan from the second version with the texture from the latest. The contrast in the second scan is a lot better than the first but it isn't anywhere near as blurry as in the latest.

Also I don't agree with adding text. I personally feel it would over complicate things and not really fit in too well. It looks fine without text.

I hope I haven't confused you by giving you different advice. Good luck, it's coming along well ^_^

Ook. I tried to take everyone's opinion into account...

Yea :D

1. Swirlies aren't really necessary, but since you lightened them, they aren't that bad. could be personal preference.
2. I don't think it really matters if the top is empty or not since we all have desktop icons anyway.
3a. I think it'll be nice if you... put the light green circles behind the dark green circle layer, and the character.
4a. at the same time, make the light green circles bigger and more blended.
4b. Move the whole middle section down and see how it looks.
5. take out the butterflies and flower brushes or what ever they are. They make the wall appear unclean and doesn't fit the wall. OR you could add in some big flowers at the bottom and somehow blend the circles in with that.
6. If you can, take out the 1234.
7. If there are no appropriate brushes, you could always draw things in yourself. this way, your wall will be more creative and blended in nicer.

Browse through the gallery for good walls as inspiration and examples since you are a new waller.

-blu3

PS. Do steps 4a+4b or do step 5.