Mmm the clouds still need some work.. they look unnatural... their shape is still to hard, you need to make more blurry work :P

about the text... i don't think that it's matching so well...
First i will try dividing the paraghaph... for example...
The curse of
a promise

then.. i would try different font styles... here are a few style's suggestions that i think that could look better...
http://www.dafont.com/home-remedy.font
http://www.dafont.com/the-last-font-im-wasting-on-you.font?nb_ppp=20
http://www.dafont.com/a-font-with-serifs.font?nb_ppp=20
Anyway keep searching maybe you can find something that fits better..
goodluck!
kisses..

I tried those fonts you said... and here's what happened.










i feel like going for the "home-remedy" or "all used up fonts"

oh yeah... i smudged and lowered the opacity of the clouds more... ^_^

I was away from SZ for a bit, so i wasn't around to comment on your udpate previous to this one, but i've taken a look at all your newest versions.

based on first impressions, i'd say go with the either the first (i'm guessing that's home remedy? no?) or the last one (all used up). they look the most fitting in my opinion. another thing with the text is that you might want to lower the opacity for the motion blurred text layer. it works the best when the blurred layer is visible but also subtle. find the best opacity by experimentation. (but if there isn't one that particularly suits your taste, there is always the choice of eraser at low opacity and the dodge and burn tools...that can help darken some parts and brightening others, if you find that necessary.)

the clouds and mist still are not quite that perfect. the chevron shaped gaps in the fog is still quite defined. and for the clouds, especially on the very right side, the edges are very visible. it should fade. use smudge in combination with blur. and i generally use smudge at a lower strength than yours...in fact, the setting from the last time i used it is about half of what you are using it at. o_O

*sigh* it'd be so much easier if i could visually show you what would make the fog/clouds look better. words sometimes are not as exact and accurate. if i have time, i really would do a demo for you, but i'm really busy these days and only drop by briefly for comments/answering messages. >_<

but your wall is getting there. so yeah, fiddle around with the clouds and mist some more. more fluid and less solid things can be hard to get right, after all. keep working =]

Agree with asa01...
the mist and cloud could use some more work.. but specially the clouds...
they still look too sharped... you need to make them more soft..

back to the text...
i like the first one better...
although i'm not so sure about the effect that asa told you... y preffer to play with glows..
So my suggestion is...
Put the "of a promise" words on a smaller size... but don't move it's position... just reduce the size so that it stays on the black part of the wallpaper...
Also turn down a bit the opasity of both layers..
You can try something different too... (this is what i usully do with text)
I play with size.. opacity and glowing effects..
I made a sample for you... if you like it, i can explain how can you make it...



kisses...

Uhhh... i hope i can get this right soon... XD... i'll be a lot busy with my studies starting tom.

i'll skip the text part and focus with the clouds and mists first... i wanna prioritize that one first.

anyways...here version 14

Ohh good job!... the clouds on the left look nice... you still need to blurry some more the ones on top of the moon.. and a little more on the right side... on the parts that are next to his hair.. some clouds have very noticable edges..
Also the mist is still needing some work... i would work on the mist that is on top of the girl.. and give to it some movement like you did on the right side...

(you are a hard worker girl ^_^, i like that, you don't give up! and that is a good thing ^_^ ... i always tend to give small critics cause most of people don't like to change their walls much, and they are only looking for approval and submition on the gallery,... but you are looking foward to something more than an ordinary approval ^_^, that would sure make you a good waller with some time of experience! )
kisses!!

The left clouds is great. you don't have to work on that one any more =] now the cloud on the right is almost there. try to use the left cloud as an example and soft the edges just a tad more. but it's a big improvement over how it used to look!

the mist isn't quite there just yet. the thing is, mist has thick and thin parts, so when making mist, there should be parts where it is highly visible but also parts where it is barely there. but the transition between the two should be very gradual and soft.

now, the glowy stuff on haji is still there ;P

and as for the text, i think you could go with a rusty orange toned color...pretty white/pale, but with a tint of orange/brown to fit the general tone of your wallpaper. clarings mentioned differing the text sizes: it is one way to lessen the area that your text dominates and at the same time add emphasis. there are several ways to do this, depending on what you want to emphasize.

do your best to update as the busy days come! but of course, although hardly anybody does this, don't compromise your studies for walling. x]

Waaaahhh... waaaahhh... thanks a bunch clarings... i'll do my best! *punches fist to the air*

tried to fix the clouds and mists again... and the text... and painted haji's forehead again like asa said... ^_^

version 15

Don't forget the glow on haji's elbow ;] his head is all better now though, so good job.

now for the text, you should alter the color of the motion blurred layer to match the text layer. it looks a bit being white. and please lower the opacity on the blurred duplicate to make it blend better. =P

yay! i got the forehead thingie...

painted the elbow and fixed the text... how about my mists... is it misty enough?

here's version 16

Ohh lol.. thanks , you are doing great!
I think that the mist it's ok... i would worry more about the clouds... the right side still needs a few touches..
(ohhh lol.. i'm loving this emoticones!!)
back to the wall lol... and the text.. i would try what i said before.. i don't like much that effect, sorry :P ...
i'm gonna see if i can put the sample on top of your wall to see how it looks..
kisses..

Ok.. here is a quick sample that i made so that you can see how it looks on the wall... (i still don't like much the "T" letter... but well, i made this quick... with a more testing it could look much prettier, i think, lol...
if you like it... i can sure explain you what i did, it's pretty simple though lol...
kisses..

i tried what clarings said about the text... so here it is...

oh yeah, i tried to fix the right clouds again...

I think you should Remove some of those "White" fog effect...add some soft light source would be better :)

Okay, i'm now going to stick with picking on the text.

first off, really consider the size of the text and the balance with the rest of the wall. as it is, the text looks really crowded into that little space between the scan and the edge of the wall. that makes it a bit awkward. so shrinking is one option, but there is always the choice of shifting the scan towards the right to make more room.

second, the coloring is not quite working. yes you have used a color scheme, but there is a problem. you haven't stuck to the exact same tones or tones similar enough for this to be considered "monochromatic". for the scan, the blade is orangish. it is a nice color that is the liveliest of everything in this wall. for the buildings, they are purplish red, dark toned, rather desaturated. for the lamp post, it is more orangish. everything up to this point is acceptable. but when the text came in, it added too much to the range of tones you have in the wall. because for the text, it is a dirty earthy yellow/brown...with not enough red to it to make it fit.

well, no comment on the glow because i am not sure how to judge it. i generally don't tell people to use glow or other default effects on text because i, for one, like to stick with the caution that default effects should be kept to a minimum. i was not the one who came up with it, but so far, i pretty much agree with it.

yeah, some thoughts for you. ^^ tweak, tweak, tweak, and you'll be on your way to submission. *thumbs up*