Okay, here is the Storyboard that Supermonchi came up with a while ago and I colored it.
Page1

I did not feel it was necissary to Color the remaining ones on Page 1

Page 2


~Slaka

Nice. I guess that one would be useful for the last scenes in the story. but i don't see some the page 1 in the screen play cibo thought the cherry blossom scene before the screen play was finished(closed to finish). we'll have to stick to the screen play unless hamsteranonymous edits it.

Okay, Ill go ahead and start up a storyboard/concept art. for Cuts 6-17 Just, posting so that we dont get doubles. Although that would be intresting as well :) x2 the ideas.

~Slaka

Thank you for continuing work while I was away.
My main PC won't be up and running until next week, so I will be revising the screenplay until then.

Let's get working hard and finish this before Christmas!

I'm so sorry, our tel. was cut, so we don;t have internet connection until now,
if you need any help, just pm me, and i'll se what i can do,
goodluck

Any progression guys?

I've rewritten (most of) the screenplay. I think it tells the story smoother, more efficiently, and realistically. The previous version was too complex and included too many visual ideas, etc.
I will be clarifying sections as we go, by writing more, and adding visuals.
More dialogue will be written out, some rewritten, and things rearranged a tad, but all the visuals are down.

I am still searching for a 'romantic' space idea for the parent to tell child Selphina. Something relevant to her situation in space... Name a star, not sure.
Please give feedback on the new version :)

Screenplay file:
http://www.geocities.com/ciboanime/anime/screenplay.txt


I've created a few storyboard panels as well at:
http://www.geocities.com/ciboanime/anime/storyboard/

Here are the current finished panels:
panel 1 - The camera will pan around before entering atmosphere
panel 1.1 - 1 second cut, camera will zoom slowly towards craft
panel 1.3 - 1 second cut, may change angle
panel 1.4 - 1 second cut, alarms going off in corridor (add more gear on wall)
panel 1.4 ver. 2 - corridor lit up red by alarm
panel 7 - lifeless body spinning out of control
panel 9 - Reaching for stabilize button(flashing), COMM is red because out of range
panel 9.2 -retro firing to hault uncontrolled rotation
panel 14 - silhouette slowly gliding over night lights/storm clouds
panel 17 - child crouched in shelter, very dark (proportions off)
panel 18.3 - moon seen from space
panel 19 - Clouds fade in around moon, they move to uncover moon
panel 24 - Orbital sunrise

The number in the panel name indicates the cut #.
I will try to add more panels daily.

(Cut 8 will be a close up of this pic LOL)...
Cut 8

Cut 8.1

Cut 8.2

Cut 8.3


Helmet coloring:





Cut 12

Some of the story edits... The original child/mother scene was complex and had too much focus on their relationship, rather than just introducing the child and getting the story going. It may still be altered a bit, but I felt we needed to head into the main story asap.
As with live-action films, the feel can be changed quite a bit just in the editing stage. And if really necessary, it would not be terribly hard to redo a few cuts.

Here is a page with all the panels I've created, includes info and alterations. This should give a very good idea of what is needed to complete each cut:

http://www.geocities.com/ciboanime/anime/storyboard/storyboard.html

I'll add all the cuts and detailed info soon. I'll also be sending out a progress report.

Suit color... I like how the orange looks, but the story calls for 'desolate, lonely, etc', so something not so bright would be better.
Good idea; there should be a flashing red light in her visor to alert to problems. This would cast a red glow over her.

Soon we will be working on final renders so please consult me on perspectives, colors, etc. during the process of making finals.

And perhaps we should come up with a title soon...

Cut 18 Refrence

I've updated the visual storyboard with all the cut #s (many without panels..) and more info.
I'll go through and add cut times and additional info/panels soon.

http://www.geocities.com/ciboanime/anime/storyboard/storyboard.html

A few cut #'s have been adjusted and added.

Great job Cibo, I think that I like the angle of the sun scene better the way you had it in the picture version. and also I was thinking that in the last scene we could show the sunrise again like you said (have the attention on the sun) and then have selphina's body close up to cover the camera with black and have the radio sound.

The animation test is at such a stale angle because that was the easiest/fastest way to get it done. We'll use the more dynamic angle.
That final scene sounds good, we'll use it. Wondering if we should use 2D or 3D for it...
Thanks, more feedback please :)

Currently going through the screenplay adding more depth and some new items.
More panels on the way; other members are free to illustrate panels as well :)
- Nudls, can you vector/paint some concept work? I can get some sketches to you.
- Slaka, how is the starfield coming?

Keep up the pace; let's not let a week go by without accomplishing something.

Sorry cibo, my computer is on the fritz right now. I am in the process of putting together my new one anyway soon, but currently i am photoshop-less. Be back as soon as I can

~Slaka