Born from the fountain of love

`elfe-noire43

Sun, 05 Mar 2006 05:18:07 -0500

Thx very very much to everyone for your help ... ithink i'll submit it now ^^ and update it if needed ^^

`hamstersanonymous

Sun, 05 Mar 2006 02:38:27 -0500

No complaints from me either, but you might want to see what some of the more experienced wallers have to say. Can't wait to see this get approved to the gallery. =D

~Yulaw

Sat, 04 Mar 2006 21:31:48 -0500

Yeah, it looks really good now. The shading is good for me, not really sure what can be done or added next. Almost ready for submit I gues? Lets see what the other have to say ^^ Good job!

~C0YR

Sat, 04 Mar 2006 13:06:58 -0500

One thing that really stands out for me is that you could add multi-tonal coloring to their hair. Maybe a few blonde strands or something, since I think the manga mentioned them being blonde.

Other than that I think it's beautiful.

`elfe-noire43

Sat, 04 Mar 2006 12:50:02 -0500

I fixed the highlight of the squarish zone and add an outline in the columns ^^
Here it is :

`hamstersanonymous

Sat, 04 Mar 2006 09:18:49 -0500

There's this one column just behind the dude, right under his arm, the highlight is correct for the rounded parts - face toward the sun - but the squarish portion just below the horizontal beam, why is the side away from the sun a lighter color? Should be in shadow, that part.

Much better without the text, I think this wall has enough stuff on it. It just didn't have the space for text in the first place, which is probably why you couldn't find a good place to put it. ;b

Dare I say that this wall is "almost there"? =D Keep it up!

`puppychow16

Sat, 04 Mar 2006 06:30:22 -0500

Man this is great XD Youre columns are missing depth because the shadows on it don't gradually fade in. There's only two shades of colors. Also the characters have a black outline on them, yet the columns don't. Maybe add a nice thin one to them too? ^^;

`elfe-noire43

Sat, 04 Mar 2006 06:25:38 -0500

I really sucks at adding text T_T i think i'll make it textless ^^
I make some parts of the columns brighter
Here is the new version :D

^^

`hamstersanonymous

Sat, 04 Mar 2006 00:12:06 -0500

Okay, my bad. The sun is at a nice height, but it's too near the characters. Try moving it left again, to about 1/4 way from the left edge. That should do the trick.

Nice adjustments to the balcony stone texture. And what Furikuu said; besides the top part of the railing being bright, the columns should also have highlights to match the 3d; like for instance the top part of that knob in the middle should be brighter.

Ama has a point about that one feather directly above the flock of birds, I say you move the birds to a blank part of the sky and leave the feather there.

Text is still not working out. I'm beginning to think you'll be better off just forget about the text. =X

Ganbatte!

~Ama

Fri, 03 Mar 2006 23:21:07 -0500

Soo pretty so far *___*
i don't really like the text tho =x
maybe have it under the yellow sun?..and move it higher so it doesn't hit her hair?
but then the white feather @_@..iuno
with all the feathers i can't really see where you could add in white text nicely...no text is always nice too =3
that one feather...has so many birds around it o.o
and it's not as soft as the other feathers =x
Love the softness of this wall ~!

`gat

Fri, 03 Mar 2006 19:27:06 -0500

The title needs to be smaller and the font larger, and the rest of it looks good to submit :)

~Yulaw

Fri, 03 Mar 2006 18:46:06 -0500

Hey welcome back!

This really is becoming a great wallpaper. I'm not sure about the text though.. Born from the fountain of love, you might change it to Fountain of Love or something similar like that to shorten the title. The balcony really looks great but! it kinda dissappears into the background, other then that its really good!

You really can shade well I see.. :P I have some problems in shading within my own wallpaper T-T got any tips for me? Greetings!

`elfe-noire43

Fri, 03 Mar 2006 13:57:11 -0500

Hum here is a new try ... the text still need improvement but what do you think about the balcony ..
As Furikuu suggest i erase some feathers ^^

Hope i don't bother you :p

EDIT : i didn't see Umboody post T_T
I jusr erased some little feathers but seems i should put more ?

`umboody

Fri, 03 Mar 2006 13:34:36 -0500

The softer version of the balcony is too pale I feel.

The text isn't particularly nice. It needs to be much clearer and more aliased.

Also, try adding some smaller feathers to give the effect some more depth.

Superb wallpaper though, You've put a hell of a lot of work into this wallpaper and when it's submitted, I'm sure you'll get all the favourites you deserve. Very well done!

`Furikuu

Fri, 03 Mar 2006 12:30:41 -0500

You have a few too many feathers and some appear translucent and blurred. You can probably just leave them opaque and downsize them a little for a more realistic appearance. The clouds can be brought out in the sky a little more and I'd definitely try and make the balcony stonework a bit more visible. Try making the colour a bit more brown-grey and working with the shading to give a rounded 3D look to it.

`hamstersanonymous

Fri, 03 Mar 2006 11:25:08 -0500

Wow, the balcony is becoming really good! If I have to choose between the two versions I'd go with the second one, the other is too saturated and looks like the stone itself is orange. A few things to improve about the balcony, though:
- Perspective problem: the top part of the railing (the light portion) is too big. About half to 2/3 that thickness is good enough - right now it looks like it's very wide (from outside of balcony to insde).
- Nice stone pattern, but I think it needs to be toned down a bit.
- More contrast, darken the parts that are in shadow more.

The text placement just got really wierd. I'm beginning to think you might have trouble putting so much text onto this wall. Also it still isn't very readable - the super-cursive script, plus the color being so close to the background, plus the same-color drop shadow - it makes it very hard to read! A dark color drop shadow will help readability but I'm not sure if it will work with the rest of the wall.

You might also want to think about cutting the text down to just "born from the fountain of love" - or remove all the text entirely, if it just doesn't work out.

There's nothing wrong with the English, "for" here is something like "as" or "bacause".

One more thing that I'm surprised I didn't notice earlier - the sun will probably look a lot better if you move it up some, so that it's about 1/3 the way from the top (and also about 1/3 the way from the left). The rationale for this is something called the "rule of thirds" - it's a composition technique, you might want to look it up. Of course, I understand it might be tricky to move the sun at this point, so it's just a suggestion for your consideration.

This is becoming a very beautiful wall. Good work, keep it up!