Fireworks is still in the works for anyone who is wondering. but for now, here is my latest procrastination project. i've been meaning to make something like it ever since i got this scan, but never got around to it. so it's finally here. managed to vector it and lay it all out in this busy busy month.
all thoughts, opinions, and crits welcome. i'm not exactly a noob anymore so feel free to be straightforward and to the point.
and i know she looks jaundiced on half her face. it comes from one of the textures, if you think it looks bad, tell me. because i'm going to look for the source and hopefully get rid of it.
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6 years, 6 months ago
this brilliant very good work my friend…. I congratulate to you gusstaria me who you taught to me to do that. the truth ..... luck and greetings xDDDDDDDDDDD
6 years, 6 months ago
The leaves on her hair R not good, the Font is very good, keep working
6 years, 6 months ago
If I'm right, I think I know what you're going for with the leaves....either fix the leaves (i.e. revector the yellow parts) and have her face be whole, or really cut into her face with the "blank" leaves (I think the latter will produce a better result).
I suggest making some more (larger) yellow roses, directly over her right side of the face, as if chunks of her face was missing (in the shape of roses...)
The 'jaundice' isn't too much of a problem, but I think the left side of her face is too dark and oversaturated.
But I gotta say this: excellent vector work so far! It's very clean, and most importantly, it fits artistically with what you have now.
6 years, 6 months ago
ah! it's so pretty! ok, now down to business. ;) the coat she's wearing has very jaggy edges at the bottom, and you can easily see at least 3 distinctive plot points. and the flowers that go into her hair... (you stroke with eraser?) they blend in very easily. I like them there, but there should be something to define them more, perhaps a darkening of the char. in some parts to bring them out, cuz it really blends into the hair.... maybe a tiny black stroke? that last point, I think, is more of a personal preference type thing. also, your big maroon blob right behind her hair... ummm, what is that? and on (her) left eye, her eyelashes are above her eyelid, it makes them look like they are floating. and other than that, missy, looks good. of course, you know I feel you could do without the text, but, eh, it looks good regardless. ;)
6 years, 6 months ago
I think you should fix the leaves/flowers on her hair first. Right now, the lines look like scribbles without definite forms. I'm not good with text myself, so I can't really say why it looks odd to me. Overall, I like the effect, and I agree with Hofodomo01 about the leaves. Good work so far!
6 years, 6 months ago
Yellow flower leaves on her face needs fizing, too jagged. umm more flowers would do...could u give her a mouth? lols umm I agree with Hofodomo, he pointed out things I noticed :) goodluck! vector is obviously good so need for fixing..except forr the mouth lols...give her sum good lips for papa to kiss hehehehehe :P
6 years, 6 months ago
thank you people for commenting =]
@negro12: not sure i understand everything you said, but thanks i suppose.
@LP: okay...
@hofodomo: made changes for ya! rearranged things a bit...though i'm beginning to like this wall more as a thumbnail than at its full version...=/ anyway, i flipped the roses and the cutout part and yeah... I hesitate to add more roses though, because i don't want to ruin the appeal of the present arrangement. and thank you for that compliment. ^^
@melly: ...you can see the bottom of her coat?? i think you didn't get this wall ^^; you are see her through a rose shaped cutout, so the maroon blob you are talking about is probably part of the background behind her and the jaggy lines are the edges of the rough rose. I made color balance adjustments for you, but her hair turned out to be purplish at the bottom. i have to somehow fix that now. x_x and i'll make a textless version for you if i submit.
@adamix: sure...and thanks.
@otakugaijin: a note that the leaves that go with the roses have unsmooth edges, kind of like uneven lumps thing...err, not very articulate, am I? so that's why the outline of the leaves parts look jagged, i suppose. haha, i guess hofodomo took all the points! and i added a mouth...it was invisible in the original scan, but here, i think it's now half covered. >_<
enough talk! update is here:
6 years, 6 months ago
I Still didnt like the leaves and stuff in front of her face.. =P
6 years, 6 months ago
Nice work but I really don't think you should obscure her face. It acts as a focal point of the wall D: Otherwise it's nice, I have no problem with the use of colours and things. How about using more heavy texture work on the background and using it to mask or blend around the edges a little more? It would help hide the jaggy edges around parts of the cutout outlines.
6 years, 6 months ago
Hey here I ma to comment again! :D
So I'll comment the last version... I really don't like the place for the yellow roses on her face... Like Furikuu said you shouldn't hide her face behind those shapes. Even if they look really nice ;)
About the rose the character is in... I didn't get it was one till you said it... You should probably add some really light outlines on the rose to make the inner shape visible... It will add some deepness to the wall and also explain the strange red shape... At first, when I looked at it I thought it was her coat like she was looking up and the shot was taking from above her...
Anyway the big rose here is a problem for me... On the second version it's good you remove the little strange stuff cut in tow part on the middle of the right side. It looked strange to me.
I love the colors in this wall but I'm uncomfortable with the feeling of warm and happiness that orange and yellow give and then the strange sad look she has... But I'm sure it's not a issue at all... You know my bad taste for colors! ;)
Note : on the big rose, you have a line in the texture JUST in the middle... It could be nice to remove it... Just to see how it goes.
The font looks good to me. But can't you find a more "plant" curly writing? I'm just wondering! ^^
Personally I would keep this wall really clean and simple on the background.. But it's always nice to try out some stuff on the background.. Just to see how it turns out! ;)
Good job so far. I'll come back later for the next version ^_^
6 years, 6 months ago
I personally feel the wall would be perfect it the pattern runs AROUND the scan and not ACROSS it. That way, we can appreciate the beauty of both without them getting in the way of each other.
I'm perfectly fine with the font. I'm bad with fonts myself, so I don't have that high an expectation there. ^^
The big rose shape thing through which you put your scan through as mentioned by zazou doesn't really stand out. It looks like a problem with the scan unless you spell it out to people. Maybe try making the area that is not part of the rose that cover the scan a little less opaque so that the outline of the original scan is still there and not suddenly chopped off?
It's really good though... *wants to do something as good as this. * ^^
6 years, 6 months ago
@Furikuu: i sincerely hope you revisit. so that you might just read this. please don't tell me to just go google it, but do you have any recommendations as to sites that have the kind of heavy texture that would suit this wallpaper?
@zazou: i lowered saturation just for you in this update. and i wasn't going to an extravagantly spidery writing kind of font but i'll look into it to see if i can find anything better. and about the texture...i'll have to search. that's because i used a blend of textures that i put together...pinpointing it and removing it without destroying the current look might take awhile. but i actually don't mind the line. xP
@boomboy: i redid the rose pattern somewhat for you ;] but i'm not so sure about making the rest of her outlines that are currently covered up more visible. i'll make it seem as if the yellow stuff is lacking some opacity.
okay, so i added a rose...anyway, that's no big point. i tried giving the big rose some petal outlines, but had to turn down the opacity or else it really cuts up the scan. i'm not so sure it looks good at all. and i mean at all. oh well. this can just be that piece of art where you tilt your head and stare until your eyes fall out and then you get what you are looking at. XD x_x
I know there are several mistakes: yellow edges showing up underneath the edge of the red pattern on top of it. color inconsistency when it comes to the original pattern that i had and the rose that i added...yeah, anything else you can go ahead and mention. just letting you know that i'm already aware of these two.
ps: do you prefer the dark red (such as the color in the leaf above "roses") or the lighter red (on the bottom, for the newly added rose)?
6 years, 6 months ago
I'm so touched... ^^
I think it looks much better now. I really (I mean REALLY) like the lighter red colour. It looks really cool and blends very well with the hair.
As for the scan outlines, I see what you mean. Now that the pattern's out of the way, I think you actually don't need to.
I'm actually sitting on the fence about the big rose petals. I don't mind how it looks now, because it kind of looks like patterns running across which blend with the patterns you already have, but I suppose you could remove it and it would still look good. ^^
6 years, 6 months ago
the wall is much more coherent now. i still think that you can smooth out some of the rose outlines...they don't need to have "bumps" in them
also, watch for where the rose meets the girl's face...make sure that there's no yellow space between.
6 years, 6 months ago
hofodomo, i'm afraid i don't quite understand what you are saying when you said "also, watch for where the rose meets the girl's face...make sure that there's no yellow space between." what yellow space? it could be either that i'm slow or i'm blind but...please spell it out for me more clearly. ^^; and a second congrats on the promotions ;]
@boomboy: okay, well i'll try out the lighter color for all of them. and i'll wait for more comments in the lines in the big rose. =)
where did everyone else go? -__- dare i say that i miss my devils? x_x
6 years, 6 months ago
Since you can't seem to get any more help, i'm bumping this.
But apart from that, I think what Hofodomo means is the outline of the big rose has an 'area' that's about 10 pixels wide going around outside the border. (I might be wrong). It's not very noticeable, but you might want to look into it. ^^
6 years, 6 months ago
thanks for bumping boomboy =) since my friends have all run off >.>" yeah...lol oh well. i'm pretty busy myself so here's a tiny update. lightened the flowers and fixed the mistake i mentioned earlier and that's about it. anything major to do? anything minor? whatever you find strange just name it and explain.
hofodomo wants the cutout part all smooth...but i don't quite have the time to fix that right now. also, the rose leaves do have these uneven edges...should i just forget about it and smooth it all out? that's all for today. and i somebody does comment on this. =_=
6 years, 6 months ago
ZOMG it took me forever to find your thread again. I'm subscribed now, so don't worry. yeah, I see what you are talking about now, the outline of the rose, it's easy to see in the thumbnail, but when you fullscreen it, not so much. maybe if the cutout didn't have the same texture as the bg? oh, I dunno, I'm really not on my game today, I can't find anyting in particular to pick on, but somehow, it's not sitting right with me. I do like what you've done with the "interior roses" though, the do seem a bit blurry. not much of a help today. sorry.
6 years, 6 months ago
Hello! Been awhile... asa01 you deserve a medal for procrastinating. Sorry but I think I've arrived too late to make any true fix it comments. It's a really cute wall! I stared at it for ages and couldn't really find anything wrong. The only thing that I'd want changed would be the horizontal line going across her face just above her nose. Just fade it or something to make it less noticable. Good job once again! Later.
6 years, 6 months ago
Hey here I ma to comment again! :D
So I'll comment the last version... I really don't like the place for the yellow roses on her face... Like Furikuu said you shouldn't hide her face behind those shapes. Even if they look really nice ;)
About the rose the character is in... I didn't get it was one till you said it... You should probably add some really light outlines on the rose to make the inner shape visible... It will add some deepness to the wall and also explain the strange red shape... At first, when I looked at it I thought it was her coat like she was looking up and the shot was taking from above her...
Anyway the big rose here is a problem for me... On the second version it's good you remove the little strange stuff cut in tow part on the middle of the right side. It looked strange to me.
I love the colors in this wall but I'm uncomfortable with the feeling of warm and happiness that orange and yellow give and then the strange sad look she has... But I'm sure it's not a issue at all... You know my bad taste for colors! ;)
Note : on the big rose, you have a line in the texture JUST in the middle... It could be nice to remove it... Just to see how it goes.
The font looks good to me. But can't you find a more "plant" curly writing? I'm just wondering! ^^
Personally I would keep this wall really clean and simple on the background.. But it's always nice to try out some stuff on the background.. Just to see how it turns out! ;)
Good job so far. I'll come back later for the next version ^_^