![Top of the World [Vector]](https://content2.animepaper.co/thumbnails/box/minute/55481/animepaper.net_vector_box_anime_the_melancholy_of_haruhi_suzumiya_top_of_the_world_%5Bvector%5D_55481_ash_hikari_minute-81dc1cc2.jpg "Top of the World [Vector]")
okay, i guess it's not that different from the average walls of AP, but it's different for me. to those of you whom it might concern:
this wall involves a pretty girl =O (or not pretty, depending on how well you like meer *shrugs*) those of you who know me, you might know that i don't normally wall those walls where the beauty of the featured girl is the sole reason for the wall...those that turn out gorgeous if done right but don't seem to carry a message. i have an excuse: i'm on the theme of identity and the focus, thus is not on meer's prettiness. and this is not the best scan of meer (in fact, it's a screenshot plus my own drawings, because after all, you wouldn't see her in the exact same pose in three sets of outfits).
this wall seems to have a vector theme. again for those of you who know me, you might know i am apathetic towards regular old vector theme walls. excuse: i thought it appropriate to wall so this time because after all, it's the identity theme and i'm just basing it on my previous id theme wall.
this wall contains brushes...once more, for those of you who know me, you might know i do not normally use brushes. i prefer to make my own shapes ("define brush" seems to hate me a lot) but this time, i'm making an exception. my excuse: i'm lazy. so sue me.
to those of you who skipped the boring part, here are my concerns: -the white part behind meer is too bright -the wall is too cluttered. (i'm thinking of removing the bar behind her shoulders and the hanging text, all of which were very last minute and unplanned anyway.)
could i drag this on any longer? 
shoot and critique away. i'm wearing armor and ready to take your wise words.
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6 years, 2 months ago
Nice vector! There's a bit of jaggyness on the outline though, I got them when I started vectoring with fills instead of stroke... I found out that applying blur once fixes it. At least in photoshop. Some detail on the eyes would be cool (since you vectored from screenshots, I can't blame you... use some official artwork for reference), it kinda clashes with the rest of her... the clothes are just awesome ^^ I'd remove the transparent version of the girl, but only the part above her. The whitey part below hair makes it look like some cool abstract shadow effect-thing
Let's see about your concerns... - I think the white part is ok, it makes the character pop out more. - I suppouse the text could go away if you added it randomly. I'm not much of a friend of text anyways. The bar near her shoulders could be replaced with a bar on a style similar of the one you did in the corner, except a bit softer... like... more transparent.
My words weren't very wise I guess, but I hope I helped. ^^U
6 years, 2 months ago
*Whips out the seal clubbing club*
The bright part: The one white on the right blinds me T_T It may just be that my eyes are tired but ahhs.... they burn!!! Slightly darker please >_> The white behind the 'meer' hurts too if I stare at it for long enough~ But remember it just might be that I'm tired :)
*Edit* More exactly, the crossing of the white from light/pale-yellow/orange to the dark red *End Edit*
Her pants are confusing the nub out of me, but that may have been your goal :D
I see jagged remains of resizing vectors and all, but then again I believe it is just my sad sad graphics card failing =/ Just throwing the thought out in case ^_^
I think the text spam is kind of fun, overall it reminds me of the cloths commercials aimed at teenage audiences :p
Personally, I prefer the brushes to not leak/overlap from background to character and visa versa~ I'm thinking mainly of the flower pattern bottom left on the hair. However I am just fine with 'piano key' arrow because it seems to have a sense of unity when crossing everything. The leafy pattern on her right shoulder looks pretty neat to me, makes me think of those silk dresses <3
I think the bar behind her shoulder is fine. What annoys me more is the horizontal (our horizontal) on the diagonal bars~ Sensory overload ._.;;
Question: Why do my vectors always fail so badly while everyone else owns?
6 years, 2 months ago
Personally I think this piece has flair and style. I don't find any problem with the differing opacities.
The whites behind Meer could be changed to light yellow though to prevent retina burn.
6 years, 2 months ago
@astrologica: i haven't added the eye shadings just yet. it'll take some figuring out because i have three separate vectors each masked differently to create this composition. in the masking process, i most likely partially masked the face for all three vectors, meaning i'll have to fully restore the top vector's facial part before i can go on to shade her eyes...which isn't hard work but yeah...^^; i did a bit of the blur though (i'd forgotten earlier on). and what do you mean one of the bars in the corner? i'm uncertain because i've done lots of bars >_<
@dragonoflore: are you psychic or something? how do you know every time i put up a wall? o.O wow. amazing. for you, i removed the floral print on her hair in the lower left corner. and the piano key arrow, as you call it, is not a brush (only the floral stuff is) but something i made. ;P i might decide to get rid of the horizontal striping on the bar...but i didn't for this update.
@diaz: flattered. and yes, so i thought about the white part. i generally despise bright stuff so now that i am making it (for some unfathomable reason), i wasn't certain if the blinding was just me or if it really was blinding.
and voila
and one with the hanging text removed.
not too many changes but any more thoughts?
6 years, 2 months ago
I'm stalking you, sorry :(
Looks fine both with and without the hanging text :o It's amazing, I can SEE now :D
6 years, 2 months ago
stalker? =O *runs away* *runs back* wait, so you mean that's all? no more complaints to make? nothing else to change/add/remove/whatever? o.O anything at all? you can see now right? so do you see any other problems? I mean i came and posted this wall knowing that it's pretty close to completion but...really?
if that feeling is expressed by more people (only if anybody else cares to say something or object about a part of the wall) then i guess i'll just fix up meer's eyes and submit....lol, my shortest sz thread ever. but anyway, i haven't submitted anything for over three months and counting and i want to ease my own guilt of being so unproductive in the walling area, so i'll wait at the most one more day before clicking on that dusty submit button thing.
eek. stalker! xD *runs away*
6 years, 2 months ago
This 'stalk thread' button is pretty neat :D
Since I am to find more to complain about...
I noticed that 'pretend' seems to be the only word w/o a pair.
The afterimage (or whatever image it is) seems to stop between her legs instead of running all the way to the corner? :o Outline also seems to fade hair and arm between elbow/wrist. It seems to be intended, but why not leave it in and give it the funky shades between purple and white too :o
I've never watched Gundam Seed before, but since everything else seems to be shifting, could you tweak the yellow star into something else as well? Last thing would be the purple outfit seems too dominant. In her jeans outfit you can see the remains of the purple outfit, but the purple outfit along the left shoulder (her left) seems to cover everything :o More fading similar to her right shoulder? :D
Clearly I am trying to fine lame ways to complain =/ I rate this wall 'A' for "Chaos but Clean"
6 years, 2 months ago
yes, 'pretend' is the only word without a pair. first off, there is no room...i mean there is space but none for it to look nice in. and second, i'm not sure i know a word that is the perfect opposite of 'pretend'. third, meer is about a struggle between what is real and what is fake, but throughout the period that audiences get to know her, she is mostly 'pretending'. this last reason is lame but whatever...x_x i'm thinking about submitting the hanging-text-free version and adding the hanging-text version in the description.
the white image behind meer fades because i did not want it to be so constant. after all, i'm working on the theme of finding an identity and nothing's constant about that. and yes, i know i'm being unreasonably defensive of my choices. *nods* :D and what do you mean by "give it the funky shades between purple and white too :o"? i'm not sure i understand what you were referring to. ^^;
you've never watched gundam seed before but meer is in gundam seed destiny ;P lol, but i get the point. anyway, everything else shifts because there is something else to replace it. there is either a yellow star or no yellow star. would you like to see it disappear instead? i though having it fade away into nothing but hair would look odd (not to mention it's extra work now to fix it, because i'd have to redraw part of meer's head).
and actually, the only part where the purple fake-lacus outfit is solid is at her hip...and perhpas chest, not sure. but her left should is definitely not solid. i purposely left a very ghostly overlay of her green vest+orange and white striped t-shirt outfit. and i can see it... o_O *blinks* *rubs eyes*
'Clearly I am trying to fine lame ways to complain =/ I rate this wall 'A' for "Chaos but Clean"' no, no, your complaints are just fine. i'm glad you took the time. :D i'll take somethings into consideration...and into consideration i mean by the judgment of my laziness. lol, i would love for this wall to get an 'A' rating, but i doubt it. the best i've done so far is 'A-'. >_< ha, chaos but clean. i've created a paradox wall! thanks for dropping by. :P
6 years, 2 months ago
Guess it is about time for me to grab Gundam Seed + Destiny off dc++ =/ My old roommate was Gundam Seed fanatic. Some weekends he would leave his playlist running, in its entire 6 songs of Gundam Seed openings/endings ^^;;
The funky white/purple was referring to the anti-retina-burn technique you used on the outline by 'meer'.
I can see the t-shirt fine too :p Was just talking about how in her -I will now dub- 'Street Clothes' you can always see the image of her purple outfit, and yet there are some completely purple outfit sections. Not really anything to complain about or change, just random observation ^^
Looking at pretend, I thought up 'Hide and Reveal (go go thesaurus.com \o/)' instead... though 'reveal' might be too many syllables compared to all the other words you used... but 'pretend' was two syllables too :D
If you feel like fading the star, perhaps a single fade (and not a complete fade either, just one similar to her shoulder) through the middle will do :p Though it might be a bit annoying to redraw the stuff under (Maybe it will score points for 'additional vectoring' ^_^)
I thought Nageni's Negima wall should have gotten AA... but apparently people didn't agree with me =/
Personally, I'm still debating whether I should submit my wall to session zero or not... I believe I may be the most stubborn person that SZ has ever seen and it wouldn't really get me anywhere ^_^;;
6 years, 2 months ago
Ah I really don't understand the mask thing... but you could do the eyes on a separate folder/layer all above the other vectors, like a new element (you can always erase the others, I think they look too "screenshotty" If you want to make them look really cool, you can always steal them from official artwork too, in case you can't imagine the detail by yourself.
As for the corner, I mean the lower right corner. The lonely bar on her shoulder bugs me, but maybe if it's more stylized like the first, it won't bug me anymore. Also, I'd like the upper part of the transparent version of her to be fading, I like the whitey part, but the upper looks weird for some reason.
Hope I helped =)
6 years, 2 months ago
@dragonoflore: i never watched the entire gs. and i only watched gsd because my friend brought it up and then decided to lend it to me to watch. the music for gs/gsd mostly suits my taste, so that helps. anyway: i'm gonna stick with no hanging text for submission - a bit too much on the chaotic side with those strings of stuff. okay, the fading star thing look funny >_< and i doubt people even notice that much about a wall. *shrugs* it wouldn't make a difference between a person +fav or not. and yes, put your wall in sz right now! >=( you are not going to get away with not showing us your wall. who knows. maybe we shall be able to persuade you to not be so stubborn ;P whether it be through means of force (i have my pitchfork at ready) or through means of verbal abuse (i could be really mean, if it would motivate you to improve your wall. xD)
@astrologica: oh i have no problem with imagining detail. drawing in real life helps a lot. xD and yes, i add some detail to the eyes and darkened them too. and i also added those turn marks to the stripe. and i also faded the head of that bg meer image.
here it is:
yes, i know this one has hanging text, but i plan on including it in the description. i randomly uploaded this one instead of the one without hanging text. i'm sure you can imagine it without its hanging text, right? any last words? lol :P
6 years, 2 months ago
Let it rip :p
Lets see... so Vectorness contest is due in 2 days... if I spend tonight finishing my Tohsaka vector, I'll have about 1 day to complete the February competition :D
6 years, 2 months ago
okay then. i might sit on it till tomorrow or a bit later. there's a whole bunch of walls in the recently submitted lineup with which mine would have to compete for attention. of course, it doesn't hurt for me to stare at it for a while and figure if i feel like changing anything else. and no worries. you'll soon seen my wall slip into the lineup. i don't seen any reason for it to get rejected so yeah. :P
and so this quiet little thread comes to a close. thanks for the comments. =]
and dragonoflore, unless you've got much natural talent, one day doesn't seem like that long a time to design and do a wall when you are near the beginning of your walling 'career' (you are near the beginning, right?). so get to work! xD the valentine's day challenge huh? maybe i'll drop by and vote.
6 years, 2 months ago
I shall put my Tohsaka vector on a halt then. The main problem is that I'm a detail whore... and unless I'm COMPLETELY satisfied I won't submit it... which might take over a week >_>
Oh well, until next time then :) Go Go Lacus/Meer!
6 years, 2 months ago
tsk tsk, excuses excuses. ;P but i understand. my first wall took me a week in session zero. i did well on it but it took time. i just better see something from you soon!
my meer wall will be submitted soon. that way, i can finally end my months of inactivity in walling. although when exactly, i cannot say. it's going to be based on my whim. and of course, i'd like to hear back from astrologica, if astrologica revisits soon.
anyway, if you intend on discussing your wall, we should do so through our userpages. no point taking my walling thread and turning it into a convo right? that'd count as spamming, i think. oh a question though: do the horizontal stripes on the diagonal bars still hurt your eyes?
6 years, 2 months ago
The horizontal bars was really only a counter to you wanting to remove the bar above her shoulder :p It still bugs me slightly when I zoom out to full screen size, too much detail in close proximity to the star~ But if it bugs nobody else, maybe its just my problem ^_^;;
I shall refrain from spamming further >_>